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Re: bullets and seeds to & from Gats and Lilies
to be continued...
Jan 12, 2009 -
Re: the cherry bloom rememberance
Nicely done. Only thing I can say is that maybe you should consider your spacing between paragraphs, because it comes across very abrupt when it's being read. With that said, ...
Jan 9, 2009 -
Re: The Legend of the Sainted One
hmm like a few have said already... you barged in out of left field with the modern day aspect to the world...
Jan 9, 2009 -
Re: Esper's Sepulchral I: Chapter 4: The Three Bells of Wavend
you weave a beautifal story with your words,in some cases you tie knots but once the kinks are wokered out you've got yourself a best-seller! don't stop!!!
Nov 16, 2007 -
Re: Thrown into hell; part 3
Okay, the reason you haven't gotten any crit's is because this is WAY too long. Break it up into some smaller posts. That will help. :D:D:D:D breaking it up into ...
Nov 16, 2007 -
Re: Life in Vana'diel (Chapter 2)
Awsome writing!! very mature !! you didn't hold back and you wrote the same way yu probobly played it...except for the whole nude thing....
Nov 16, 2007